Trust me, I can understand about rushing to meet deadlines. Nothing like putting it off until the last day and throwing something together in the span of, say, a lunch break? *dies*
I'll add more detail and stuff in the next draft, keeping in mind some people overlook stuff.
It wasn't exactly 'subtleties' that were lost, there just wasn't anything to draw it together aside from the bare bones minimum. I didn't overlook anything. You can clearly see where one character assumes one thing, then the others bring something up and the waters become more muddied, but still. It just seemed like all the characters were confused in general, not in a good way, and that didn't make it a very interesting read. This is, as you know, easy to correct, and I'm sure you're already working on it.
I can see where you were going with this fic, and I'm sure after you've had time to revise this piece it will come across better, but as it is now, just one small fic in the Open category, it doesn't work as well as it could. It's fine. No more, no less. *shrugs* However, I will definitely keep my eyes out for the final product.
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Date: 2007-01-15 09:51 pm (UTC)I'll add more detail and stuff in the next draft, keeping in mind some people overlook stuff.
It wasn't exactly 'subtleties' that were lost, there just wasn't anything to draw it together aside from the bare bones minimum. I didn't overlook anything. You can clearly see where one character assumes one thing, then the others bring something up and the waters become more muddied, but still. It just seemed like all the characters were confused in general, not in a good way, and that didn't make it a very interesting read. This is, as you know, easy to correct, and I'm sure you're already working on it.
I can see where you were going with this fic, and I'm sure after you've had time to revise this piece it will come across better, but as it is now, just one small fic in the Open category, it doesn't work as well as it could. It's fine. No more, no less. *shrugs* However, I will definitely keep my eyes out for the final product.